Once upon a time I was at the park with my friends and we started to play hide and seek. I ran to the trees and I saw a very funny thing… A bird was walking up and down a tree with a fish in it’s mouth. I could see that the bird had SEPARATED the fish with its beak and eaten all the insides. Then I remembered that we were playing hide and seek so I ran off to the stream and got the shock of my life! I saw a big BATH with a MYSTERIOUS ORANGE CAT washing itself! I screamed and he looked at me and he looked so angry that I sprinted back to my friends and we went to get ice cream. Then we went home talking like crazy but I didn’t tell them what had happened. When I went to bed I was sure I heard something behind the door…
Uh oh, watch out. I think the cat is coming to get you. I liked the story, it was funny, especially how the orange cat was washing itself.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comment Ben. What is your class blog so we can have a look?
ReplyDeleteMiss Panther
R11 Teacher
i loved your story it was funny and a bit scary
ReplyDeleteTahlia Rm11
Hi Nina,
ReplyDeleteI love your 100 word challenge. It is so funny it mad me cry of laughter.
Byron r11
Hi Nina
ReplyDeleteWow, what a great story. That cat seems scary! our school has just started blogging, and have just started the 100 Word Challenge. They'd love it if you could have a look and leave a comment!
http://st-pauls-and-all-hallows-cofe-junior-school1.j2webby.com/?cat=5
Hi Mrs Isik
DeleteThanks for the comment. I really like your classes word challenges.
From Ella R-W
Room 11
Hi Nina,
ReplyDeleteGreat piece of writing, well done. I particularly like the description relating to the fish being separated. It creates a vivid image. Keep it up.
Why don't you come and have a look at some of the attempts my class have made with the same task. y6pewithall.primaryblogger.co.uk
Mr Eitel-Smith,
Pewithall Primary School,
Runcorn, England.
Hi Nina,
ReplyDeleteGreat writing. I particularly like the description of when the fish is being separated. It creates a very vivid image. Keep up the ace writing.
Why don't you come and have a look at some of the attempts my class have made with the same task. y6pewithall.primaryblogger.co.uk
Mr Eitel-Smith,
Pewithall Primary School,
Runcorn, England.
Hi Mr Eitel-Smith
ReplyDeleteI would love to see your class's 100 word challenge!
My teacher has added your blog to our "Other blogs we like" list.
http://room11gms.blogspot.co.nz